Updated Intro Scene: Communicating with the reader.

Its pretty apparent that this comic has a lot of new and strange futuristic concepts. I've spent a lot of time reworking the dialog and expanding some ideas so that the reader is not overloaded with new information. I reckon a good story has to be clear while also withholding key information to help hold interest. So this scene will explain some things, but will leave a lot to be further explained.

So communication has been the key word for me lately. I have been showing friends and family the intro scene and it seems that it is pretty fucking hard to understand. There is talk of all these wierd things like digi-dreaming set in a world that is still very unclear and unknown to the reader. In short, there are too many unknowns. So this version has a lot more clarity than other versions. It still leaves a lot of mystery, and could still be too vague in some area's (the flashback scene doesn't explain the idea of secure codes very well (but that might not be such a bad thing)) but I think it is beginning to work.

It's a draft, so its pretty messy. I have numbered the panels so you know where to go...